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'''Written and discontinued by Vulcanfag, continued by Cryptek Czerasp'''
 
'''Written and discontinued by Vulcanfag, continued by Cryptek Czerasp'''
  
Captain Mir'San the winter blade stood aboard the battle barge Vulkan's Wrath with Forgefather He'Stan as it hovered over the dead world of Sarmatia III. The world lay in the eastern fringe of the galaxy. It was an ill omen-ed world that navigators brave enough to even enter the dark region these stars inhabit avoid. Mankind had never learned the nature of it's former occupants. Of those brave few men who dared to step upon its surface, few returned, and none sane enough to tell what they had seen. And yet, the Tome of Fire had many strange passages that matched the rumors that sprung from this world.
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Captain Mir'San the winter blade stood aboard the battle barge Vulkan's Wrath with Forgefather He'Stan as it hovered over the dead world of Sarmatia III. The world lied in the eastern fringe of the galaxy. It was an ill omen-ed world that navigators brave enough to even enter the dark region these stars inhabit avoid. What it's occupants were has never been known by mankind. The few men to step upon its surface often come back mad if they do at all. What was undeniable however was that the Tome of Fire had many strange passages that matched the rumors that sprung from this world.
  
"I thank you for you and your men's assistance." Mir'San's grey face filled with pride . "It is an honor forgefather, to assist you in finding one of the artifacts from the tome, my men in I need no thanks."
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"I thank you for you and your men's assistance." Mir'Sans grey face filled with pride . "It is an honor forgefather, to assist you in finding one of the artifacts from the tome, my men in I need no thanks."
  
 
A short time later they were descending to the world in a thunderhawk. A veteran squad, apothecary Calderan, captain Mir'San, the venerable dreadnought Bray'arth Ashmantle, and Forgefather He'Stan.  
 
A short time later they were descending to the world in a thunderhawk. A veteran squad, apothecary Calderan, captain Mir'San, the venerable dreadnought Bray'arth Ashmantle, and Forgefather He'Stan.  

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